Lore Ideas for my Platforming Game

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The plot is you wake up on a deserted island with amnesia, with only journal entries for context. I want ideas for the “journal entry” part of the story. I only have lore for the first journal entry and that one was a bit lackluster in my opinion and I think could be added on to, this is the note.

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Journal Entry 1/13/1987
Everything feels like a haze, I don’t remember anything before I got to this island until I reviewed this journal. Apparently, a couple gims and I were on our way to a mythical island that was rumored to have treasure called Trapasure Island, but there was a bad storm and the gims and I got split up from the rough water. I could assume after that, I was knocked unconscious, lost my map along the way, and was washed up here. There doesn’t seem like another way to get out of here except by going up. -(insert explorer’s initials)

I would like some lore on the explorer’s backstory as well as some lore on the island’s history, since I have no ideas and hit a roadblock. The game’s name is a combine of the words, trap and treasure, so maybe that could help for some ideas.
You will be credited if you want and please tell me if you want anymore details on the game.
Any help is appreciated, and thank you!
Edit: Take your time, no rush. =)
Edit 2: If no one else has lore ideas, I’ll mark a solution tomorrow
Edit 3: Still might go on for a bit
Edit 4: 2 more days and I’ll mark a solution IF nobody else is doing this.

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I can write some lore later. Busy rn.

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I can write some lore!
(later)
I have a question, do you want like, me to write different journals(like your note) or just details of the game?

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1/14/1987
After a semi good nights sleep I got up as early as I possibly could and started the long climb, after a while I saw some strange metal scraps, one shaped like a dome and another looked like a crab leg. Later on a ledge I found a crab, now I am ending the day on this ledge chewing on the remains of the crab
1/16/1987
I forgot to update, but I made it to a huge ledge with a forest. I was able to catch two small birds, I have tried to also catch a deer but it was too quick for my stubby legs. I feel like I am being watched now as I camp and write.
1/17/1987
I am still very tired, must sleep… It is mid-day now, I packed up and continued walking but then I saw my campsite again, I rubbed my eyes but there it was, still there. I turned around and saw the same blackened ground, I continued to look around. There was the campsite again same log, same tree in the background. What was happening? Confused I walked over to one campsite and tried to sit on the log but I passed right through it. What? Next I walked towards where I thought the rest of the mountain was and there it was, behind me was my campsite and in front was the mountain. Clear as day, so I started climbing.
1/18/1987
I made it to another gargantuan ledge, this time the grass had changed to a dark black sand, ahead was burned trees and some strange fire creatures, mainly a humanoid with dark charcoal flesh and bright yellow eyes that burned into my soul not to mention that their entire body was caked with flame. Five charged at me, yelling a battle cry, suddenly seven blasts sounded and a strange creature dropped from a burned tree, all five imps collapsed, a stone embedded in each’s back. I slowly walked backwards and stumbled, almost falling off the cliff, until the creature grabbed my leg and yanked me back on the ledge. The creature next pulled out a strange device and fired-
1/20/1987
I soon woke up in a strange machine, the creature seemed to be driving, holding a strange controller of sorts in their hands, then hands shot out and stabbed me with something, whatever it was it knocked me out

I was back on the ship rocking away, my comrade entered the room and walked up to my hammock “Good morning Captain!” he saluted at me “Good morning” strangely I returned the gesture without knowing what it was. Next thing I knew I was at the stern of the boat, talking to someone of importance “I know we are four days away from the island but do you think that we should start prepping all the materials on the ship?”
“No, Purser we are fine for now” I heard him mumbling something under his breath. Suddenly I was teleported below deck where the Purser was standing eyes closed, arms out. “What do you think you’re doing?!” The Purser didn’t even move he threw his arms at me and then down then one arm up. A large tentacle burst through the keel and reached around the room, I dove to one side and pulled out my wand but it was too late, the tentacle found me and grabbed my body. I heard the crunch of bones as I was thrown against the starboard wall (the right wall).
2/1/1987
I woke up suddenly in a small tent, I got up and walked outside, I couldn’t believe what I saw. “GOLD!!! GOLD!! All the climbing all the casualties! It was all paid off” then suddenly a giant tentacle came in from nowhere and grabbed all of the gold and pulled it away. A group of masked figures stood in shock as the giant pile of gold was pulled underwater. I ran to the edge of the plateau and looked over, a giant underwater castle. A masked figure walked up and placed a mask over my head. I turned around, it was the deckhand that awakened me! shove. crunch My body hit the water, hard. Bones cracked, my body stiffened, I drifted down to the bottom of the sea. I found a small device in my hands, a medpack… Fully healed I got up and swam to the castle.
I found my wooden wand and prepped it for a full on battle…(burn mark in paper)

I pulled myself into a small room, and grabbed another medpack, I next stormed the throne room of the castle, a familiar face stared into my masked face “How may we serve you Captain?” The Purser teased “You disgust me Purser, why? Why did you sink our boat, why did you k!ll everyone?” I felt some rage boil in my veins
“I did what I had to. Besides aren’t you su-”
my laser flew through the air and struck its target.
“HA! Think that is going to do anything. I used to look up to you captain but no–”
another laser, this time a tentacle swooped in and took the hit
"WOW, two cheep shots?! I thought you had honor. "
“I used to, then I realized, honor is an excuse, No more excuses!”
I charged at the Purser, dodging his blasts of stone. When I got close, the tentacle shot out but I was smart enough to leap over the tentacle and fire twice before using my final leap to jump back. I skidded back, suddenly a rock struck me in the shoulder, white hot pain leaped through my body, I next ran up a wall, dodging more shots then leaped to the next wall, I threw myself at the Purser and switched gadgets mid flight, the tentacle was to slow and I was able to hit the Purser with the pickaxe. The Purser stood up and screamed a syllable in some forgotten language, runes in the walls lit up and exploded, I needed one more hit, I ran. Flying through water is a strange experience, my body was flung at the target by the explosions, my wand fired two shots, one landed on the target and sent the Purser flying through the wall. My body was thrown from the palace. I swam upwards, eventually my head burst through the water and I breathed heavily, the mask made me able to breathe under water but now I was on my own, the mask shattered when I surfaced and with no choice I swam to shore… (fin [a happy ending is implied])

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Sorry I wasn’t able to reply earlier, had something I needed to do, but wow, this is wonderful, don’t know how you do this stuff. I will need to tweak some stuff though in order to make it so I don’t have a risk of getting banned on Gimkit Creative (for not being child friendly) and to fit the stuff I already placed in the story, if you’re fine with that. =D
Also @kh44359 different journal entries that consist of the same protagonist in each entry. =D

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Okay, starting(it might not be as good as ReDGh0st’s but lets do this)
1/14/1987
No food, no camp, no memory, and no map. I started making my way up the hill on Trapasure Island, at least, that’s what I called it… Literally nothing, NOTHING, special about this island. Like, mythical island? Seriously? All I see is bare dead grass with rocks (or whatever terrain you have in the map). Ugh, maybe my luck will change tomorrow.
1/15/1987
As I scrambled around the island looking for some kind of information of treasure or anything that can get me out of this junky island. I stumbled upon an this ancient looking ruin with imprinted words on it. I read it, curious what it said. “Upon the purple hill. There lays a statue of King Gim(the king Gim, what is it called again?). Awaken, he will as this is the island of Aurora Land. Or, so it was, now it is ruin.” I guess I got better luck than I thought today. I need to read more of these ruins.

( I know what your thinking: :face_with_raised_eyebrow: this is kinda boring. I will try to spice things up in later lore :smiley:

continue!
1/16/1987
No luck of finding any more ruins today, that was probably the only one. Huh, I wonder where the statue of the King Gim is… I have a feeling that might be where the treasure is located! I’ll look around the island for the statue.
1/17/1987
I look around the island and find an ancient wand. I start to walk away, it’s an old LAME wand, come on, who wants THAT?! I see it glow green with magic. Hmm, maybe it will help me. I pick it up and put it in my pocket just in case I might need it.

1/18/1987
I’ve been looking around and whenever I almost reach the top of the hill/mountain I feel like I’m in danger. Like, I can’t stay around the area for so long or else I will get… k1lled. Weird. Maybe that’s where the statue is located?

1/19/1987
It’s been 5 days and I’m starving, I have to get the thing I came for, treasure and get out. Somehow, get out actually. I don’t even have a boat. Well fate decided whether I live or d1e so I’ll just have to trust my instincts. My gut keeps telling me to stop running away from the top of the hill and just GO. I follow my gut and walk towards the top of the hill. I found it. The statue. YES! Just gotta look around to find treasure! There MUST be something as this is the last spot on the whole island. But, something happens. As I get closer to the statue. The King Gim starts to… MOVE?! I walk slower and get scared. It pulls out a gadget. The legendary gadget of Aurora Land, the Evil Eye! Luckily, I found a gadget while scoundering the island as well. The King Gim aims to fire at me. Panic takes over. If I don’t sh00t first, he’s gonna k1ll me, oh my God, hurry up and fire at him! I take aim and fire. It seems that’s not enough to defeat him. I fire multiple times, dodging every attack he gives me. Until, he speaks, “Earth, I beg for your help. Come to my will and have the rocks in the ground defeat this enemy.”
I scoff, that will never work.
I was totally wrong, rocks came appearing everywhere trying to hit me everywhere I go. I can’t fire at him when I have to keep dodging, what am I going to do!? I think… and an idea comes to my head, “Let’s give that King a taste of his own medicine.”
AH HA! I shout, “Earth, I beg for your help. Come to my will and have the rocks in the ground defeat this enemy.”
I grin. And then, NOTHING HAPPENS.
I feel foolish and the king laughs, “only one can control the Earth!”
My mind races as I dodge more rocks. Then, it clicks in my mind, “one can control the Earth, the other can control something else.”
Confidence fills me as I speak, “Ice, let me bind you to my will, please help.”
I honestly don’t know why I said, “Ice”, my gut just told me to.
Ice started appearing and attacked the King Gim.
King Gim, “NOOO, HOW?!”
I smile slowly as the statue crumbles and a door in the floor is revealed.
Satisfied that I’m safe, I open the door and it’s a dream come true.
Gold, jewels, money, everything I ever dreamed for.
But one thing I see, is probably the best. A boat with oars and a map.
I pile all the treasure onto the boat and sail out of the island.
Joyful tears spill down my cheeks as I finally find a way to my home island.
Happy Ending!

@TwiceOnce, does your game have one ending or do you want it to have multiple endings?

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It has basically two endings, one when you don’t have all the journal entries and one where you do, in which at the end is just 3 more popup.

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Few questions
  • How many entries do you need?
  • Any specific things that need to be included?
  • Any specific formats?
  • Any specific gims found on island?
  • Whats the name of the game, if there is one?
  • May have more questions!
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Great questions and welcome back =D

  1. I planed for 10 - 15 entries but now that I see the ideas I might change that.
  2. I mean, if you could add on to ReDGh0st’s or kh44359’s lore then that would be great.
  3. Just put the title as the date and the context as the lore.
  4. Nope (I don’t know how to make sentries harmless, if I can figure out a way, then yes)
  5. The name is Trapasure Island, mix of the words trap and treasure.
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Thanks! I’ll work on getting at least a few entries down so you can see my writing styles.

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I’ll start off with 3. If you like them, I’ll make more! If not, that’s totally fine as well!

1/20/1987

Dear Diary, it’s been one week since I arrived. I still remember nothing from when I landed. No food, no camp, no memory, but I have found a map for a treasure called Trapasure Island. I’m not aware of the dangers or risks, but perhaps the risks outweigh the rewards?

Until next time.
{Explorer’s name}

1/27/1987

Dear Diary, it’s been two weeks since I arrived. I remember nothing from when I landed. It’s been a hard two weeks- but totally worth it. I’ve found signs of life- as well as suitable water sources. No food, so I’m hungry. The map I’ve found is pointing me towards a moutain. Should I go or should I stay? (Could be interactive right here.)

Until next time.
{Explorer’s name}

2/14/1987

Dear Diary, it’s been a few weeks since I arrived. My memory is terrible as ever, but I have been able to remember a few things. There was a wooden ship ((could allow player to gather wood to build torch or shelter or smth else)) and a terrible storm. I remeber that we crashed landed on the eastern shores, near the hills. I’m unaware of the dangers ahead, but maybe it could mean that we have an adventure! I hope this useless map isn’t so useless soon…

Until next time.
{Explorer’s name}

Thoughts? BE HONEST! Totally ok if you don’t like it, I’m writing this stuff in the dead of night rn

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Thoughts about writing style: Wonderful! I like it.
Although more clarification about my game, it’s just basically Don’t Look Down with lore and story.
Besides that, I like it =D

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DLD…?? Sorry that I don’t know!

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DLD stands for “Don’t Look Down”, one of gimkit’s platformers.

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That makes a lot more sense. You can tell I haven’t been on forums for a bit :rofl:

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Thanks for the feedback. Given clarification, here are some updated versions!

1/20/1987 *Not edited*

Dear Diary, it’s been one week since I arrived. I still remember nothing from when I landed. No food, no camp, no memory, but I have found a map for a treasure called Trapasure Island. I’m not aware of the dangers or risks, but perhaps the risks outweigh the rewards?

Until next time.
{Explorer’s name}

1/27/1987 *Edited*

Dear Diary, it’s been two weeks since I arrived. I remember nothing from when I landed. It’s been a hard two weeks- but totally worth it. I’ve been hiking up a HUGE mountain so far. I’m nearing the top, but I still have a bit to go. Upwards I go!

Until next time.
{Explorer’s name}

2/14/1987 *Edited*

Dear Diary, it’s been a few weeks since I arrived. My memory is terrible as ever, but I have been able to remember a few things. We were indeed heading to hike a huge mountain, and to find a treasure! I noticed just today that the map said I needed to go into a cave system- which I assume is at the top. I really hope I can find this treasure soon and just get home!

Until next time.
{Explorer’s name}

Does this fit your map better?

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Yes! But there’s no mountain in my game, no worries though, I can still tweak that to fit it =D
Edit: Nope, it’s late in my area too

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I tried! So surprised I was able to even get smth out this late for me lol

Need anything else? I can make more tomorrow.

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