Dialogue help (Reality Show Game)

I am creating some dialogue and need help, is this good?

P = Player

H = Host

P: Wh- Where am I?

H: WELCOME! You’re on my 5,432-story Skyscraper!

H: I’ve invited you and your friends to “ISLAND SURVIVAL”

P: W- What’s that?

H: It’s my Reality Show, Of course.

P: H- How did I get here?

H: I’m not at liberty to tell you that.

P: H- Huh?

H: I. CANT. GIVE. YOU. THAT. INFO.

P: Why?

H: Because.

P: Why?

H: BECAUSE.

P: WHY?!?!?!!?

H: I HATE YOU!

P: That’s Not Very Nice…

P: * SOB*

H: WAIT! Please don’t cry. I’m Sorry!

P: You Are?

H: Yes! Just don’t cry.

H: Please…

P: I’ll Stop Crying Sniff

H: You Will?

P: IF YOU TELL ME HOW I GOT HERE!

H: …

H: Ok, Lets See…

H: I Hit you with a car, kidnapped you to make up for it, and cracked your bones back in place to heal you.

P: … WHAT?!!?!?!?!

P * Whispers to self*

P: i n whisper (GOD HECK NO)

H: There’s A prize at the end of the show…

P: Go on…

H: That’s all there is to it just try and survive.

H: Go into the helicopter.

P: YES SIR!

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`That’s great!

Thank you!

WOW that’s awesome! Just remember that 6 year olds have to read it. :wink:

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Dont worry, there isnt much bad stuff, just lots of sybols :crazy_face:

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noice
the dashes seem a bit too much though- might wanna stop adding those after the 3rd or 6th dialogue sentence
otherwise it’s just unnecessary stuttering for no reason lol

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I think this is pretty good

still, I think you should change it just a bit just just in case your account gets banned.

He was hit by a car and got amnesia! How would you talk? :stuck_out_tongue_winking_eye:

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I would remove this, I wouldn’t want to risk my game being taken down for this

Fixed it

nice :grin:

Yea this is better

Don’t forget about the punctuation!

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Guide?

:scream: Um… ok i guess pretty weird and quirky…

That was what i was aiming for :stuck_out_tongue_winking_eye:

Do you need help creating the dialogue your did you just want to know if it was good?

Well i need help with part two. After part one I need dialogue for one your in the heli

Pardon? You need help with the dialogue after you get into helicopter?

yes, Your on a game show and the Host is talking to you about it and stuff